Reminds me of my first tries ;)
Don't take the score too hard. You have only used standard FL synths and most the melodies are all just one long note which has been chopped in the pianoroll. The eq. in this track is awful, did you eq at all??? you can barely hear the kick or anything for the main synth.
The transaktions are also bad, "use the filters to create fade outs and fade ins ( an easy way is done by adding the (fast LP) to the FX channel attached to the synth or whatever you want to fade, make an event on the cut freq where you start form ex from 0%-100% and combined with res. that starts from 100% and ends on 0% thats how to to create a simple and lovely fade in to make a fade out simply do the oppasite) hope this review has been helpfull
Peace out there :)